The follawing bar charts shows the different modes transport used to travel to and from work in one Europian city in 1960 , 1980 and 2000

The follawing bar charts shows the different modes transport used to travel to and from work in one Europian city in 1960 , 1980 and 2000
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The follawing bar charts shows the different modes transport used to travel to and from work in one Europian city in 1960 , 1980 and 2000
The
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bar chart illustrates
that
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the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Most
noticeably
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of all, it can be seen that the
year
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2000 was the highest figure for graduation in Cambridge,
while
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the period of 2015 was the greatest number in Oxford.
Moreover
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, London was the lowest point for the time of 2000,
whereas
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Bristol was the smallest figure for
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year
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of 2015. Beginning with Cardiff, the 2000 accounted for 10%,
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the figure for the 2015 was
sligltly
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slightly
higher at 14%. The second worth pointing out is that a
smilar
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similar
trend can be
obeserved
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observed
in 2000 and 2015 in Bristol. Turning to Bath, it can be seen that the same times accounted for 7% and 12%, respectively.
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, a significant difference can be observed in the figures for graduation rates of abroad students in Oxford. The
year
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2000 was at 14% as opposed to the time 2015, which was more by 25%.
To sum up
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,
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the graduations
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graduations
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rates of international students in 2015 were higher than
the
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year
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2000 in whole regions.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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