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Question: Many young people today have problems finding stable jobs. What are the reasons for this, and what impact does it have on society?

Youth unemployment is a growing concern in many countries. It is caused by various economic and educational factors and has far-reaching effects on society. One reason is the mismatch between education and job market needs. Many young people graduate with skills that employers do not require. Economic downturns and automation
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 reduce available job opportunities. The impact includes increased poverty, frustration among youth, and even rising crime rates. Long-term unemployment can damage mental health and social stability. In conclusion, addressing youth unemployment is crucial for a healthy society. It requires reform in education systems and policies to boost job creation.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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