An increasing number of larger shopping areas, malls and department stores are leading to the decline of smaller corner shops.What are the advantages and disadvantages of shopping in larger shopping center rather than smaller, more traditional shops? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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, shopping areas and other huge shopping areas is important for big cities. And there are a lot of different positive and negative sides for both customers and merchants. First of all, there are some disadvantages. In my opinion, the biggest thing is that customers can have fresh food from smaller
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shops
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. It's connected with time we spend in a way to a shop. With the decreasing of small
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shops
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customers should spend more time in traffic jams or on subways to big shopping
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. The second thing I can name as a disadvantage of the growing number of shopping centres is less
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noise
around small
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shops
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. Imagine if all the people in the city, like Berlin
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, used only one big mall for shopping. As for me there will absolutely packed and noisy place. Of course, there are some advantages to increasing the number of
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. One of them is easier delivery of goods to
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in big shopping
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. It will produce lower prices.
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, there will be less pollution because of the shorter ways to the
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. And the second positive side I want to show is less time for commuting between different
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with different types of goods.
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, if you need to buy a laptop and some groceries. If you prefer a big shopping mall you will be needed to go to different
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in one big building and that's it. And vice versa if you choose small
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near your home you will need to go to
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shop and to another shop with laptops. More of these
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can be placed in different corners of the city.
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argument shows different sides of an increasing amount of big
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and shopping centres and
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small
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of small
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corner
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shops
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. But I believe people in big cities need both big
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and small
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near their houses.

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