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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuess both these views and give your own opinion.

Today, there are some
arguements
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arguments
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history
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 should be one of
main
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coursee
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courses
 at school,
due to
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 the popularity of STEM and other related courses. Some people pointed out the necessity of
history
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 in
education
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, especially to help
students
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 acknowledge the process of
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 development, which is a crucial part of
education
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.
Since younger
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 generations need to understand what their ancestors
had done
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 and, more importantly, what impacts that brought to today's society. The
opponent
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opponent's
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 views emphasized that
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most positions don't require employees with historical knowledge.
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,
school
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schools
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 should offer
students
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 more functional subjects, in order to help them find better jobs in the future. From my
prespective
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perspective
,
history
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 should be mandatory at school, even more, it
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 to be paid more attention than before. Notedly,
education
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 is not only for helping
students
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 acquire specified skills, but
also
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enhance
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 them to be more qualified
citizenships
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 and holistic human beings. undoubtedly, the strength of historical
education
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 is
that
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apply
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descovering
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discovering
 and
summerizing
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summarising
 some regular
pattern
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 of
human's
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human
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 development. Over
thousand
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thousands
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years
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of years
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civilization
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of civilization
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, people may changed
theire
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their
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 and external environments,
however
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,
the
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human
instinct
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instincts
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 are still
same
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the same
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.
Therefore
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, it is
vitial
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vital
 for youngsters to absorb
experience
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experiences
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 from the past.
Overall
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,
history
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 subjects may
incapable
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be incapable
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 of teaching
students
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 skills, but be able to appreciate their life's wisdom, sometimes, which is even more valuable.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to improve structure.
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Add examples or specific events from history to support your points.
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Your writing shows a clear understanding of the debate around the importance of history.
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You make a strong case for why history should be taught in schools.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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