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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the difference
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car
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theft
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 between four countries -Great Britain,
Sweden
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,France,and
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 Canada from 1990 to 1999. From an
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 perspective ,
it is clear that
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Sweden
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 saw a substantial increase over the years. Another interesting point Great Britain was the highest for
car
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theft
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 compared to the others. Looking at the graph in detail, both France and Canada saw a marginal drop in 1999 and the ratio was around 6,
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moreover
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 the UK reached
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 peak in 1996 with a percentage of 20 , in 1991 there was a slight rise in
car
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theft
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 in
Sweden
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 and the rate was about 8
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 it remains stable,but in 1996 there was a growth of
car
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theft
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 and the percentage was 12,
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 the
theft
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 in
Sweden
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 at first seen a max in 1990 with the rate of 9 ,
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 in 1999 there was a decline in the number of vehicles has stolen and the ratio was around 6.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, theft, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theft rate
  • fluctuations
  • trend
  • vehicle theft
  • per thousand vehicles
  • decade
  • steady increase
  • steep decline
  • comparative analysis
  • noteworthy changes
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