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The graphs below show the products’ distribution and consumers’ comments regarding “Free-From” products. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the products’ distribution and consumers’ comments regarding “Free-From” products. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph above displays the percentages between 1982 and 2010 of how different materials were recycled in a single country.
Overall
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aluminum
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 cans
percent
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was
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increased gradually over the following years,
while
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 plastic products almost saw a law rise
in
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over time. On the one hand, glass containers began from 50% in 1982 and
it
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 continued decreasing until
it
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 reached 40% in 1992 but after
that
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it
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 increased gradually to reach 60% in 2010. Paper and cardboard products
were
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 the highest proportion
for
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 recycling in 1982
and
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it
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started
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from
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 65 and it reached its peak in 1994
with
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 80% percent but it started to fall in the next years to stop at 70% in 2010.
On the other hand
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aluminum
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 cans and plastics were the the only materials that did not start from 1982 and were the lowest
popularity
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 through the period of time.
Aluminum
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 cans got 4
percent
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 in 1986and it surged over time to get about 44% in 2010. Plastics started from 4% in 1990 and it almost increased
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 about 2%
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every year to reach 10% in 2010

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • consumer comments
  • gluten-free
  • dairy-free
  • sugar-free
  • health-conscious
  • satisfaction
  • taste
  • quality
  • pricing
  • availability
  • market demand
  • dietary restrictions
  • lifestyle choices
  • trend
  • prevalence
  • mismatch
  • correlate
  • improvement
  • growing awareness
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