The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
the pie chart illustrates the generated electricity in
Germany
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and
France
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from renewable
sources
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and other
sources
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in the year 2009.
Overall
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, both countries
depends
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depend
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on renewable
sources
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very less
compare
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compared
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to other
sources
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.
France
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is
depended
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dependent
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on Nuclear power,
while
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Germany
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is relaying
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relies
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on conventional thermal
source
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sources
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of
energy
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. In terms of natural
energy
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sources
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Germany
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used Biomass and wind power and
France
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used
majority
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the majority
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of hydroelectric
energy
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.
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with, thermal
energy
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59.6% was used by
Germany
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,
while
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France
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used 76% nuclear
energy
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compared to 23% used by
Germany
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.
France
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have
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very less
option
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options
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to use thermal
consuption
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consumption
is
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apply
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around 10.%.
Moreover
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,
combined
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the combined
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consuption
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consumption
of
energy
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in
Germany
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is more
by
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than
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50 Billion Kwh
at
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per
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560Billion
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560 billion
kwh.
Furthermore
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, in renewable
sources
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of
energy
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used by both
nation
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nations
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is
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are
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nearly
same
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the same
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,
where
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whereas
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France
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used
very
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a very
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less
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small
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amount of solar
energy
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less
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then
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than
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a single percentage.
Germany
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used around 94% of their
energy
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from biomass,wind and hydroelectric
sources
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,
while
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France
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used
huge
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80.5% renewable power only from hydroelectric current.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, france, sources, energy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity generation
  • renewable sources
  • conventional thermal
  • nuclear power
  • hydroelectric power
  • biomass
  • wind energy
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • significant
  • contributor
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