Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Asking if alternative medicines and treatments can be used
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of standard treatment and analysing the growing popularity of these methods among patients can be both a controversial and helpful way to discuss today's
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problems and medical demands.
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there has been a decrease in trust in traditional media and state
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in the
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couple of decades, the
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world, from the World Health Organisation to big pharma companies to especially
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insurance sector got struck by
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loss of trust the most. The problem occurs from governments
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media to deceive their
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for numerous goals ranging from going to
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, putting certain sectors and even specific countries in front of other sectors and companies, attacking certain public and political figures and so on.
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method worked for the ruling class for a significant amount of time but things started to get shattered after the 2000s. The
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realised most of the media regardless of the political spectrum, is mostly a tool for big interest lobbies and wealth groups who have
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much more leverage in their governments than relative to individual voters.
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wave of distrust
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by certain
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or names but rather jumped into all including
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which has been criticised for a long time for big pharma's suspicious activities, ruthlessness of
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insurance sector, and questionable practices and directives of WHO. No matter the reason these alternatives can be quite dangerous and even involve horrible scams designed specifically for already sensitive patient groups. Most
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should approach these methods with a critical mind. Just like they use their critical skills for traditional
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and
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. In
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alternative methods and treatments should not scrapped at once but still should be approached with care.
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should not allow the growing trust and reliability issues of today's
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to make them more susceptible and a target for scammers.

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Try to give clearer examples or evidence to support your points about alternative treatments. This makes your argument stronger.
positive
You raise important issues about trust in traditional healthcare, which is a relevant topic.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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