THE BAR CHART BELOW GIVES INFOMATION ABOOUT THE NUMBER OF STUDENTS STUDYING COMPUTER SCIENCE AT A uk university between 2010 and 2012. Summerise the info by selecting the main features, and making comparision where relavent.

THE BAR CHART BELOW GIVES INFOMATION ABOOUT THE NUMBER OF STUDENTS STUDYING COMPUTER SCIENCE AT A uk university between 2010 and 2012. Summerise the info by selecting the main features, and making comparision where relavent.
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the number of men and women, and the percentage of international and British
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who attended computer science in a university in the UK over a 2-year period
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,
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the number of local
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was the highest throughout the period shown. The percentage of international male
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experienced a significant increase,
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international
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slightly grew. In 2010, The proportion of British men and women attending the computer science course was around 39% and 33%, respectively. The percentage of local male
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dropped to
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nearly
25%,
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females rose dramatically to almost 45% in 2011. By 2012, the values for both British men and women taking that course reached just under 45%. In regard to international
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, the figures for males grew substantially from 20% in 2010 to just below 40% in 2012.
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, the proportion of international females joining that course started at around 14% and increased moderately to exactly 20%.

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