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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The pie charts illustrate the percentage of
water
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usage
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 in six distinct areas throughout the world for three
purpose
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purposes
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, industrial, agricultural and domestic use.
Overall
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, the majority of
water
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 is used in
agriculture
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the agriculture
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 section,
excepting
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except
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 for North America and Europe which are dominated by industrial
water
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usage
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.
However
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, the remaining four countries allocate a minority percentage of their
water
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usage
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in
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to
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 industry. 
It is clear that
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 Central Asia accounts for the largest amount of
water
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usage
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 in farming activities (88%), followed by Africa with 84% in the same field which exceeded that of South East Asia by 3%,
while
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 South America only constitutes about 71%.
Moreover
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, all these four regions have
water
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usage
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 percentages of below 20% in domestic and industrial activities. Turning to the other countries, North America and Europe, they all
make up
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 for almost half of their
water
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 storage for industries, with 48% and 53% respectively.
By contrast
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,
water
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 use in agriculture in the two countries questioned are both doubling and tripling the
water
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 consumption in
domestically
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domestic
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 development.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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