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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The provided pies illustrate the percentage of differentiated aims in water
use
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 among six regions of the world. The figures for North
America
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 and
Europe
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 are considerably higher than those for South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 in the
use
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 of industry, which accounts for about 50%. North
America
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 and
Europe
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areapproximately
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are approximately
 5 times as high as South
America
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 and South East
Asia
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, which make up almost 10%.
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, they are more than 5 times the figure for Africa and Central
Asia
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(nearly 5%). Regarding the agricultural
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, North
America
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 and
Europe
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 are significantly lower than the remaining categories, constituting more than 70%. The percentage of North
America
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 is 39%, more than
Europe
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(32%). In terms of
use
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 in domestic, South
America
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 ranks the dominant, making up for 19%, followed by
Europe
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 and North
America
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, which record similar proportions at 15%. Africa(9%) ranks in third place, and both Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 are at the bottom of the ranking, standing at the same level at 7%.
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, in the case of
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Industrial
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,
Europe
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 takes up the largest proportion. With regard to
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Agricultural
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, Central
Asia
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 accounts for the highest figure. And South
America
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 makes up the largest percentage of Domestic
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.
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, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 are identical, representing the smallest share.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, america, europe, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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