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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The pie charts indicate the proportion of
water
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 used for different types in six areas(North
America
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, South
America
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, Europe, Africa , Central
Asia
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, South East
Asia
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) of the world. 
Overall
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,
agriculture
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agricultural
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use
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 accounts for the highest
preparation
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proportion
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 of
water
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consumption
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 in South
America
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, Africa, central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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.
By contrast
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, industrial
use
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 accounts for the first in Europe and North
America
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. In Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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, agricultural
water
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consumption
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exceed
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exceeds
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 80%,
whereas
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 the domestic
use
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 and industrial
use
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 remain very low, almost lower than 12%. Meanwhile, in South
America
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, agricultural
use
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 is the highest (71%), followed by domestic
consumption
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 at 19% and industrial
use
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 at 10%.
While
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 in North
America
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 and Europe, the highest
consumption
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 of
water
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 is
industrial
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for industrial
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use
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which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 is around 50%, almost three times higher than domestic
use
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.
In addition
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, agricultural
use
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 of these two regions
are
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is
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also
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 high, approximately 35%
in
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on
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 average.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia, use, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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