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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The
chats
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 illustrate the proportion of water used for industry,agriculture and domestic
in
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use in
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 six continents of the world. It's clear that the
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Agricultural
used
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 accounted for the largest percentage in South
America
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,Africa,
Cental
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Central
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Asia
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 and
South East
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Southeast
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Asia
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,
while
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 the Industrial use
take
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 up the largest number in North
America
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 and Europe. In Africa,
Cental
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Central
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Asia
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 and
South East
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Southeast
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Asia
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,the proportion of
aricultral
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agricultural
used
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 is beyond 80%
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.
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In contrast
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,it's only 71% in South
America
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.
Regardiing
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Regarding
 the industrial and domestic use,the proportion of domestic
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 in South
America
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,Africa,
Cental
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Central
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Asia
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were
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 higher than
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in South
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 East
Asia
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,which had more consumption in industry
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 12%. In North
America
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 and Europe,the percentage of
industrial
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industry
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 reached about 50%,
agricultural rank
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agriculture ranked
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the
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second
place
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with about 35%,and
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domestic use was at the bottom of the ranking with about 15%.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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