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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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 the percentage of
water
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 used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
Overall
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, industrial
water
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use
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 constitutes the largest
proportion
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of
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the
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North
America
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 and Europe. Agricultural
water
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use
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make
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 up the largest
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 of
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South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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. North
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America
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America's
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 domestic
use
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have
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 the smallest
proportion
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 of
water
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use
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,
while
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 domestic
use
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accounts
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 for 15% of
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Europe, with a difference of 2% between the two. Agricultural
use
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accounts
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 for 39% of
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North
America
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. The percentage of Agricultural
use
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 is 32%.
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 with, 7% of the domestic
use
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 is
on
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 Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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.
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, the percentage of domestic
use
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 in South
America
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 is higher than the other three regions, which
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accounts
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 for 19%.
In addition
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, industrial
use
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 constitutes the smallest
proportion
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 of
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Central
Asia
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. Industrial
use
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accounts
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 for 10% of
the
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South
America
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, which is the largest
proportion
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 of
this
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, proportion, america, asia, accounts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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