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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
he
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The
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 pie charts illustrate the
water
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useage
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usage
 in different ways in six
areas
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 of the world. In four
areas
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,
water
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 used in
agricultural
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agriculture
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 takes the biggest part.
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However
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However,
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 for the rest two
areas
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,
water
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 used in
industrial
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industry
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 takes the lion’s share. In Africa,central
Asia
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 and south east
Asia
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,
water
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 used in
agricultural
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agriculture
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 respectively
occupy
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occupies
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 84 %,88% and 81%. They are more than
fours
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four
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 times
about
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apply
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the
water
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 used in
other
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the other
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 two ways. Obviously,central
Asia
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 and south east
Asia
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 take the smallest part of domestic used
water
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, both occupy 7%
,
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however
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however,
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 the biggest counterpart happens in South
American
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America
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which
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, which
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take
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takes
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 19%,more than two times
of
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that of
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 central and south east
Asia
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. As for industrial
used
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apply
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water
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, North
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use, North
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 America and Europe take the lead in the six
areas
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. The former takes 48% and the latter takes 53%. Both of them are more than the
plus
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sum
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 of the rest four
areas
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, areas, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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