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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004
The line chart illustrates how much
chicken
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,
beef
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, lamb, and fish
was
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were
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 consumed weekly in a European country over a 25-year span, starting from 1979.
Overall
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,
chicken
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 was the only meat that experienced a steady and significant increase in
consumption
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 over the period,
while
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beef
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, lamb, and fish all showed a general downward trend with some fluctuations. On the one hand,
beef
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 had been quite a popular meat among the four types, with around 210
grams
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 consumed per person each week in 1979.
However
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, after some noticeable fluctuations in the early years, its
consumption
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 dropped sharply and reached a low point of about 110
grams
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 by 2004.
Likewise
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, lamb followed a similar pattern, decreasing by roughly 90
grams
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—from 150
grams
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 in 1979 to nearly 60
grams
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 in 2004. Meanwhile, fish intake experienced a modest decline of around 10
grams
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, making it the least significant change among all categories, dropping from just under 60
grams
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 to approximately 50
grams
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 over the 25-year period.
On the other hand
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, the
consumption
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 of
chicken
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 started at just below 150
grams
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 per person per week. Over the next 25 years, it saw a gradual yet dramatic rise. By the mid-1980s,
chicken
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 had already overtaken
beef
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 and continued to grow substantially in the following years. By 2004,
chicken
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consumption
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 peaked at approximately 250
grams
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, making it the most popular type of meat among the four shown.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chicken, beef, consumption, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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