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The line graph shows the rise in the homeless people across UK from 2010 to 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the rise in the homeless people across UK from 2010 to 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph
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represents
represnts
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represents
 the
increased
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increase
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 of
displace
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displaced
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people
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 in the United Kingdom in the period of 6 years
Overall
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, it is clear from the chart that
England
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 had the highest number of homeless
people
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 during the period
.
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whereas
whereas
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, London at the lowest for all the years.
Furthermore
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,
all
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apply
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of
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the UK
had
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has
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 faced a huge
rose
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rise
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 in the
amount
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number
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 of displaced
people
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 the number was
increase
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increasing
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 year by year. At the
begging
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beginning
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 of the period London had 500 poor
people
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. 5 years later the
qauntity
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quantity
 had doubled and reached 1000 by 2015.
while
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 it kept steady.
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hand
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hand,
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 the rest of
England
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 had the same issue,
whereas
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 the number started at about 1500 and ended up to
arount
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around
 3200 in 2016.It was almost the half.
According to
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 the graph
England
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 was only
dealling
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dealing
 with 1700
people
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. But, by 2016 the amount went up to 4300
homless
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homeless
people
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.
In addition
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, in 2010 the UK had 5200 poor
people
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.
Furthermore
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, by 2016
England
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 had 4300.
witch
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which
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 means it
a
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is a
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big rise.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, whereas".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, england with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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