: Some people think sending criminals to prison is not an effective way to deal with them. Education and training are better. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Incarceration of individuals rather than focusing on their rehabilitation and adjustment in

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society

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a debate for

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long. In

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we will focus on whether one should side with

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or education. When we talk about imprisonment it might give a very bleak picture of the person's future. To address that we will talk about how when we hold captive criminals it affects their ability to have a functioning life in the future making it relatively harder to adjust

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once they are done with their sentencing.

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causes a great deal of distress mentally

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emotionally for eg. constant threat to survival, not having the basic needs met,

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through a great deal of turmoil of being away from the family

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all rather an ineffective way of encouraging an individual to work on themselves.

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, on the other

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we can encourage these offenders to rather work on themselves and

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their frustration and anger out in

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being said we can provide them

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for their life after prison and

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work on their

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will ultimately give them a reason to be alive and will

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make it easier for them to step

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like carpentry can help them be employed in the future in a wood shop.

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important for us as a

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treat offenders as humans and an integral part of the civilisation and to give them a chance to rehabilitate and reflect on their actions for the better.

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Jul 1, 2025

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Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic.

coherence and cohesion

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Add specific examples to support your points, making them clearer.

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You have a good understanding of the issue and present two sides of the argument.

coherence and cohesion

Your conclusion nicely wraps up the essay and restates the importance of rehabilitation.

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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Linking words for giving examples:

for example
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to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

281 words

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criminals
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jobs
skills
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