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The charts below show the results of a survey conducted by a university library to find out the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey conducted by a university library to find out the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts indicate the
libary sevices
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library services
fulfillment
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fulfilment
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 percentage of full-time and part-time pupils in a university in 2010. The survey has three selections to choose from which are very,
quite
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quiet
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 and not at all
while
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 the service categories are about the IT support team and the current opening hours.
Overall
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, we can see from the chart that full-time
students
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 are mostly very happy
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with
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the
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apply
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service satisfaction
whereas
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 part-time
students
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 have slightly different results. First of all, more than half of the proportion of full-time
sudents
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students
 are very satisfied with the IT support offered
while
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 45 per cent of
part time
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part-time
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students
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 were not happy with the IT team.
However
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, both types of
students
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 remained one third in the
quite
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quiet
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 categories and less than a quarter of full-time
students
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 disagreed with
the
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apply
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IT
whereas
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 part-time
students
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chose
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were
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 very happy with the services. Despite the differences from
IT
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the IT
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 support survey,
students
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 were more
satistied
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satisfied
 with the current opening hours which full-time
students
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 had more than two
third
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thirds
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 and part-time
students
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 had more than three quarters.
Similarly
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, they both had nearly the same proportion of quite happy and not at all.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • university library
  • full-time students
  • part-time students
  • opinions
  • services
  • satisfaction
  • comparison
  • satisfaction levels
  • different library services
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