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Nowadays many people choose to be self- employed rather than to work for a company or organization. Why it might be the case? What could be the disadvantages if being self-employed?

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 for themselves rather than
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a company
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independent
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 day by day ,it might cause but it
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 everyone could
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 from home easily,they do not need to go
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nowadays companies
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 not pay much to
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employees
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 is selecting
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 emplyed.
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self employed
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 we can start our own business to spend our life easily .
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 we need to
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 many hours that
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 is very hard to do and
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 has to follow
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 management
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self employed
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 we can
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 any
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any where
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 and main
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 more we will earn more if not
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 will ask us to do
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 ourselves any
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company
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 we will get salaries on every 1st date but in
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self employed
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self-employed
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 we face
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 in
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 thing.
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 in companies everyone gets experience and
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 many
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 easily and
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learn
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various
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that is
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time
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 too but there are many seniors we can learn from them and
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company
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the company
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 easily
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company
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 gives
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every
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conclusion
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conclusion
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the debate
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of
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company
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comapny
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company
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self
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being
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employed
employeed
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employed
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 because we can earn and learn from both
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 but in the end
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will
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 prefer
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self
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employed
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employed

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to have a clear introduction that states your main point and gives an outline of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraphs for each point. Each paragraph should only talk about one idea or point.
task response
Provide specific examples to support your points. Instead of saying 'many people', try to give a reason or example related to their choice.
coherence and cohesion
Check for spelling errors and make sure you write clear sentences. This helps readers understand your ideas better.
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You showed a clear understanding of the topic and discussed both sides of self-employment.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • autonomy
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • entrepreneurial spirit
  • financial instability
  • self-motivation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • healthcare
  • retirement plans
  • administrative tasks
  • compliance
  • isolation
  • camaraderie
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