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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island (2010-2017) 4 3.5 3 Millions of visitors 2.5 N 1.5 0.5 0 2010 2011 2012 2013 2014 2015 2016 2017 •* * Visitors staying on cruise ships - Visitors staying on island -O- Total

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island (2010-2017) 4 3.5 3 Millions of visitors 2.5 N 1.5 0.5 0 2010 2011 2012 2013 2014 2015 2016 2017 •* * Visitors staying on cruise ships - Visitors staying on island -O- Total
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provide
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the
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and the
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vaiation
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variation
 of the graph
elucidate
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elucidates
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 the
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proporation
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proportion
 of foreigners
visited
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who visited
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the
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caribean
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caribbean
island
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 time period between 2010 to 2017. in 2010 the
guset
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guest
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staying
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stayed
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 on
cruise
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ships
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 was 250.000.
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 in 2011 the
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proporation
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proportion
 of
guest
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guests
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was
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increased was 500.00 who
staying
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stayed
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 on
cruise
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ships
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.
while
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traveler
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traveller
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 who
staying
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stayed
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in
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on
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island
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the island
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 in 2010 was 750.000.
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 in 2011 was the
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proporation
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proportion
 of
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traveler
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travelers
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 stable.
overall
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its
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 evident that in 2012 the
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traveler
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number of travelers
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 amount who
is staying
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stayed
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 on
cruise
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ships
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was decrease
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was decreased
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 was 250.000.
however
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 in 2013 the
numer
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number
 of guests
was
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rise
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 was 500.000.
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in
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 addition the total of
travelers
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travellers
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 who visited the
island
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 in 2010
i
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was
million
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.
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however
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 in 2012 was
sharply
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 rise was 1,5
million
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.
according to
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 what is shown in the graph
that is
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illustarte
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illustrate
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travelers
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travellers
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 was
shraply
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sharply
 go up from 2010 to 2014 was 2,75
million
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 guests
arrived
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in
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on
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 the
island
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.
whlie
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while
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coustmer
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customer
 who
is
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apply
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satying
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sitting
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cruise
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ships
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was growing
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grew
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 from 250.000 in 2012 to 2
million
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 in 2016.
in
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another points
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another point
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 the people who
is
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are
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 staying in
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island
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the island
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was increase
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was increased
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 between 2011 to 2013 was 1.5
million
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.but
time
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the time
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 period between 2013 to 2015 was steady
1.5
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at 1.5
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million
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 people.in
additional
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 from 2015 to 2016 was slightly
drop
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dropped
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 was 1.25
million
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 in
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contrast
constart
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constart,
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 the total of
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proporation
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proportion
 of
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the traveler
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traveler
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traveller
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 was growth from 2010 to 2017
in
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apply
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caribbean
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Caribbean
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island
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was
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apply
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3.5
million
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.
therefore
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 people prefer staying on
cruise
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ships
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then
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 staying on the
island
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, moreover".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proporation, island, cruise, ships, traveler, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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