A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism overweigh its drawbacks?

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has been a primary source of income in many regions of the world.
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, it can
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cause harm
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of improper management.
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in the civilised globe.
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, I will partially support that the advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
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, the economic advantage of travel in the modern world can not be overlooked because
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income can be hugely beneficial to both private and public concerns.
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, millions of people visited Saudi Arabia for tourist reasons to see the historical places and to perform pilgrimage,
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huge number of people boosted the economy of the country. It can
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provide employment opportunities for people who can work in tourism-related industries like hotels, restaurants and
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is tourism promotes cross-cultural connections, appreciation and understanding,
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do not sit together in public
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a good family ties and
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might not be the same in other countries.
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, money can end up being spent only on tourist areas
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other places and industries suffer and most tourism jobs are seasonal.
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, environmental pollution is one of the major disadvantages of travel. When large numbers of
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visit, they invariably burden the transportation system and contribute to pollution locally and globally.
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, flying one mile in a plane produces about 53 pounds of carbon dioxide, and tourists account for almost 60% of air travel and
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environmental pollutant has a negative effect on human health. In conclusion, most nationals generated their revenue from
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and
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can be a major tragedy if it is not well managed.
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both private and public organisations
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the cross-cultural connections.
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, the environmental hazard that might result from overcrowding in the tourist centre.

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You have shown an understanding of both the benefits and drawbacks of tourism, which is good for balance in your essay.
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Your examples about Saudi Arabia and environmental impacts are relevant and help support your points.
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