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The pie charts below show the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.

The pie charts below show the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.
The two charts illustrate the
houses
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 owned and rented in the United Kingdom in 1991 and 2007, The data was presented in the percentage.
Overall
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, more
houses
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 were owned and rented in 2007. Most of them owned the
houses
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 in
both
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years
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.
Both
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years
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 have
the
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a
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 similar data projection
which
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apply
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starting from
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the home
a home
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home owner
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homeowner
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, followed by social renting and private
rentind
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renting
 and
finally
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 social housing.In 1991, 60%
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people
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of people
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 in the UK owned a house .
However
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, the house ownership increased in by 10% in 2007 which accounted for 70%.
People
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 that
renting
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rent
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the
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apply
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houses
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 for social
reason
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reasons
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 has
decreases
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decreased
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 from 23% in 1991 to 17% in 2007.
In contrast
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,
people
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 who
rent
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rented
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the
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apply
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houses
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 for private
reason
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reasons
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 were maintained in
both
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years
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 which accounted for 11%,
although
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 the number of rented
houses
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were
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was
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 higher in 2007.
People
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 owned
the
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apply
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houses
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 for social
reason
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reasons
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 were the lowest in
both
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years
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 which was 6% in 1991 and 2% in 2007.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses, both, years, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • owned
  • rented
  • housing
  • show
  • decreased
  • increased
  • shift
  • trend
  • years
  • common
  • prices
  • economic
  • changes
  • people
  • homes
  • compared
  • specific
  • features
  • main
  • information
  • around
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