The graph below the number of overseas visitors who went to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009

The line graph illustrates
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guests from overseas for different causes in 1989 and 2009.
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,
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two Trent shared similar standings in other one has various changes. In 1989 visitors for meetings friends and relatives were around 3 million and
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figure followed an uninterrupted upward trajectory to 8 million in around 2005. But
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growth wasn't sustained.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly present all the different purposes for visiting, not just focus on friends and relatives.
coherence cohesion
Use clear paragraphs for each main point and make sure each point is linked to the graph.
coherence cohesion
Try to conclude your essay by summarizing the main trends observed in the graph.
positive
You started to describe the trend for friends and relatives very well.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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