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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007, Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007, Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The graph illustrates the number of
visitors
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 from abroad to three different areas in a European country over a 20-year
period
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 from 1987 to 2007.
Overall
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, the
coast
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 remained the most popular destination throughout the
period
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,
while
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 the
lake
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 experienced the most significant fluctuations. The number of
visitors
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 to the
mountains
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 increased steadily but remained the lowest among the three. In 1987, the
coast
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 attracted around 40000
visitors
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, significantly more than the
mountains
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 and the
lake
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.
Although
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 visitor numbers to the
coast
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 declined slightly by 1992, they reached 70000 in 2007, thereby maintaining their leading position. The
lake
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, despite starting with the fewest
visitors
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 in 1987, experienced the most rapid growth. Visitor numbers rose dramatically to peak at 75000 in 2002, temporarily equalling the
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coast
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cost
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.
However
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, unlike the
coast
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, the number of
lake
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visitors
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 fell significantly to 50000 by 2007, making it the second most visited area by the end of the
period
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. In comparison, the
mountains
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 experienced a gradual and steady increase over the 20 years. Visitor numbers rose from 20000 in 1987 to around 35000 in 2007.
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 the growth rate was modest compared to the lakes or
coast
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, it was more consistent and without any major fluctuations. The
lake
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 surpassed the
mountains
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 in popularity as early as 1992 and maintained that advantage for the rest of the
period
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, period, coast, lake, mountains with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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