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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

There are some problems in the changing room in your sport center. Write a letter to the sport center manager. In your letter, you should: - Describe the problems in the changing room - Explain why the sport center is important for you - Suggest what the manager should do.

Dear
sir
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Sir
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 An, I am writing a letter to you because I want to talk to you about the changing room of your sports
center
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centre
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. In the
last
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 week, the window changing room was broken by a ball. So I can't
not
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apply
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change the clothing in
this
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 room and I can't
not
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apply
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exercise. The sports centre is important for me because I am very fat and I need exercise. So I want you to fix the window and help me and I can go to the sports centre. I hope you will see
this
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 letter. Thank you very much. Best regast, Tuan Tai

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coherence and cohesion
Try to start the letter with 'Dear Sir' or 'Dear Manager' for a more formal greeting.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to create separate paragraphs for each main idea, like problems, importance, and suggestions.
task achievement
Use clearer language to explain why the window affects your ability to exercise.
coherence and cohesion
End with a phrase like 'I look forward to your response' to sound friendly.
task achievement
You shared your feelings about why the sports center is important to you.
task achievement
Your request for fixing the window is clear and direct.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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