Write a letter to the local authorities for requesting sports facilities for your age group in your area.

Dear Sir, I am
writitng
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writing
this
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letter to request you to provide some new facilities for the young
people
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of
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area. I am Jasvir Kaur,
resident
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a resident
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of Guru Hargobind Nagar, Ludhiana. I am working in HDFC
bank
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in the NRI branch. There are around five sports available for children and other
people
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right now
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as badminton, football, lawn tennis, huge running playground and cricket as well. These are amazing sports and all adults enjoy the facilities which are given by you.
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, the are other small outdoor games available.
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,
from
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fast few months, we
were
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thinking about
indoor
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an indoor
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swimming pool because
plethora
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the plethora
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of young
people
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of
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in
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my area are impeccable swimmers and they are going outside for practice as they want to participate
natinal
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national
swimming competition which is coming next year. So, I am
requeting
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requesting
you if you can consider my suggestion it will be great for all of us.
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, with the introduction of
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new swimming
pool
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young
people
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can spend much more time
on
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apply
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practicing. Apart
form
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from
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this
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, school children can
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learn swimming
form
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them and build some great skills for their future. Hoping for a
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careful
carefull
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careful
consideration of
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suggestion Yours
faithfulluy
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faithfully
, Jasvir Kaur

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Improvement
Make sure to check spelling and grammar. There are a few mistakes, like 'writitng' and 'requeting.'
Improvement
Try to keep one main idea in each paragraph. This makes it clearer to read.
Improvement
Include a stronger closing statement that reinforces your request clearly.
Strength
You have a polite tone, which is good for a letter to authorities.
Strength
You clearly state the request for an indoor swimming pool, which is the main point of your letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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