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Band 3

trhere is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.

in modern times , most
of
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the
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couples aspects that they
spent
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 time together till
the
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a
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 few years after marriage without
concieving
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conceiving
.
while
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,
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i
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 personally
cosidered
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considered
 it to both sides and
i
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 will give positive and negative reasons with examples.
firstly
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, there are certain partners
think
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who think
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 that they should
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a
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financially
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 stability
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for atleast
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atleast
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at least
 four to five years after marriage.the
scond
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second
 reason
that
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 they want to mentally and emotionally prepare to bring
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this
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these
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 significant
dicisions
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decisions
 in their life.
in addition
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, there are
serveral
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several
 people bleived that when they have not be stable in their life. as result they have not capable
for raise
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of raising
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 their
childern
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children
as
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an
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 appropriate way.
further
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more
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they
deciede
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decide
 to mentally strong to understand their child with
strong
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a strong
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 point
view
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of view
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.
for instance
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,
on
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one
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 of my friend concieving one
years
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year
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 after marriage and they have
facing
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faced
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alot
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a lot
 of
struggle
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as
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a
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financially and emotionally so , there are many examples
to compelled
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of compelling
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 their parents to stop pragnacies.
on the other
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hand
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 it
also
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 be a downside cosequently
this
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dicison
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decision
 affects their
mother
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mother's
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 hormone and
childern
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children
 health
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such
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as most
of
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the
infant
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infants
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 struggle with
down
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 syndrome
beacuse
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because
 of late pragnancy and disturbed hormones so it will huge impact.
to conclude
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 that it depends on their person to person and it is their personal
dicisons
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decision
 to hold it in their life so , every
pupils
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pupil
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 should choose their path with their own
convinient
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convenient
convenience
.

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coherence and cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your ideas. Ensure each paragraph has a clear main point that relates to the topic.
task achievement
Expand on your ideas more clearly. Provide more examples and details to support your arguments.
grammatical range and accuracy
Use simple and correct sentence structures to make your writing clearer.
task achievement
You presented both sides of the argument, showing understanding of the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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