People often think about creating an ideal society, but most of the times fail in making this happen. What is your opinion about an ideal society How can we create an ideal society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

An ideal
society
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has become a dream for most
people
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in the world.
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, it is
difficulty
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to make it into reality.
This
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essay will explore how to create a perfect
society
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.
Firstly
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,
harmonious
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a harmonious
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society
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can be achieved through mutual cooperation
in
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between
people
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.
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, in
neighbourhood
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the neighbourhood
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area, each person has the responsibility as a community in order to develop
peaceful
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a peaceful
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environment. They should respect each other by not throwing rubbish inappropriately especially if they live in the
high rise
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building.
This
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behaviour will prevent
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in
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between
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neighbours
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and eventually create an ideal community.
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in Japan, the
enviroment
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environment
is tidy and no rubbish can be found along the roadside.
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practice has been taught to their kids since childhood , either at home or during school time. Other than that, the
government
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also
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plays a big
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in order to achieve a perfect
society
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. The
assistants
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from
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government
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the government
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in the form of
financial
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would help the
society
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to live happily. The adequate facilities
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as
hospital
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hospitals
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,
school
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schools
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, shopping
mall
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malls
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and public transport provided by the authorities make the public live in
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apply
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harmony.
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, these infrastructures not only
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people
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burden but
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give them
a
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peace of mind.
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, subsidy from the
government
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such
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as fuel
subsidy
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can
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helps
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the community to reduce
their
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its
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financial constraints. All of these efforts
make
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by the
government
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is
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to make sure
people
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live in
a
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good
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conditions
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. In conclusion, both individuals and governments should play their
role
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roles
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in order to create an ideal
society
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. Good personal behaviour and great governance will make a perfect
society
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.

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Use a variety of examples and explain them clearly.
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Your examples, like the one from Japan, are relevant and support your points well.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ideal society
  • equality
  • social justice
  • sustainable practices
  • community engagement
  • economic stability
  • cultural diversity
  • accessible healthcare
  • fair justice system
  • educational opportunities
  • environmental sustainability
  • active participation
  • inclusive society
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