The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2019 & 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2019 & 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2019 & 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The chart illustrates the shares of four retail sectors i.e. Clothing, Groceries, Electronic Appliances and Home and Kitchen in the online sales of Canada for a time period of 5 years, starting from 2019 to 2020.
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, Electronics
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peaked
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market by the end
whereas
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clothing
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the clothing
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sector which dominated earlier significantly declined. In 2019, Clothing was the biggest
share holder
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with
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38%,
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and the
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House and kitchen area gave it
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tough competition with being at second place with 29%. But both declined simultaneously in 2020, with the former
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22% and the latter with about
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% drop. Now, the areas which have grown are the Electric Appliances and Groceries. Even though,
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electronics started with just 19% in the start, but clearly surged to end at 45% almost covering half the total market.
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, the groceries have
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a minimal rise of 7% and coming up with
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equal contribution to that of the Clothing by 2020.

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