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3 July 2025, The maps below show the town of Langley in 1910 and 1950.

3 July 2025, The maps below show the town of Langley in 1910 and 1950.
The maps illustrate the difference between the city of Langley in 1910 and 1950.
Overall
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, there
had
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 been extensive developments, particularly in new buildings and facilities.
In addition
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, the entire town
areas
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area
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 was being utilised, compared to some wasteland in 1910. In 1910, there were two main streets, which
was
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Jordan
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Street
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 and
Sherman
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Street
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 that unconnected each other.
Jordan
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Street
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 was located
in
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on
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 the left of the site with
the
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a
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 vertical line
with
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of
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 townhouses along
this
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street
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. There was
also
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 a railway line in the south with railway worker’s cottages to the north of
this
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 railway line. A café was opened near to houses and opposite to the laundry
with separating
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separated
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 by
Sherman
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Street
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.
In
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 the north of
Sherman
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Street
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also
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 had houses,
a
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and a
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store
that
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adjacent to the laundry. The factory was established to the north of the site. In 1950, townhouses
was
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 replaced by flats,
while
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 the location was moved entirely to the west of
the
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Jordan
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Street
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. In that year,
Jordan
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Street
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 was connected with
Sherman
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Street
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, which
is
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was
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 made a T-junction. The area that used to be a factory
,
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 now had been replaced by
Sherman
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 Mansions with a laundry and a café to the right of
this
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 mansions.
Moreover
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, there were three additional stores,
where
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which
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those
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apply
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was
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were
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 located opposite
to
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apply
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a
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apply
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new
Sherman
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 Park that
separated
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was separated
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 by New Lane.
The
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apply
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Sherman
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 Park
also
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 had
children’s
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a children’s
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 play area.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words jordan, street, sherman with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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