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The map show the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map show the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map
depict
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depicts
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 the
center
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centre
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 of Paris, highlighting two possible sites for a new restaurant.
Overall
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, section 1 on the Right Bank offers interesting facilities, like The Maritime Museum and the Aquarium,
although
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 it attracts fewer people. Section 2, on the Left
Bank
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Bank,
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 can attract
many
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more
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 visitors than
first,
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due to
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Art
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the Art
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 Gallery and The Eiffel Tower.
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details
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the details
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 shown on the map, area 1 is on the north side of the map
that
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apply
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closer to Hakerm Bridge and The Maritime Museum which has 8000 visitors each day. Another structure is the Aquarium located on the
north-east
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northeast
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 corner, near
to
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apply
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Debility Footbridge
that
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which
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 welcomes
near
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nearly
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 2000 individuals every single day.
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, area 2 is on the south corner, near
to
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apply
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Lena Bridge and The Eiffel Tower, which draws around 16.000 tourists,
while
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Sports
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the Sports
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 Centre building
that
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apply
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located closer to Bir Hakeim metro station welcomes approximately 500 visitors and Art Gallery on the south-east corner draws 750 people every single day.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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