The pie charts below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The tables shows how these causes affected three regions of world during the 1990s.

The pie charts below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The tables shows how these causes affected three regions of world during the 1990s.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The tables shows how these causes affected three regions of world during the 1990s.
The histogram and the tabulation
depicts
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the various reasons
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land degradation in
1990's
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.
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the former details about the causes for the whole world, the latter distinguishes on the basics of
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three regions i.e. North America, Europe and Oceania.
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, over-grazing can be considered as the main culprit,
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the maximum land degradation happened in Europe. As the pie chart shows
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three main reasons are over-grazing, deforestation and
over-cultivation
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with each almost having one-third of the total percentage i.e. 35%, 30% and 28% respectively. The rest only have a contribution of 7% in total. The table
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that the most affected region is Europe with a total of 23%, in which all
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three showed
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share starting from deforestation,
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and over-grazing with 9.8%, 7.7% and 5.5%. Oceania was the second area affected where the percentage
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13%, and the major contributor was over-grazing with 11.3% exceeding
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all other regions as well. North America was least
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degraded
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with 5% apparently, the maximum contributor here was
over-cultivation
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with 3.3%.
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taking a closer look, it reveals that each of them
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hit their minimums,
over-cultivation
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was at 0 in Oceania, deforestation and over-grazing were at 0.2 and 1.5 respectively in North America.

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