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The chart below show the number of different purpose is six areas of the world

The chart below show the number of different purpose is six areas of the world
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charge
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 50%, the promotion of
water
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, usage of industrial agriculture and domestic
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purpose
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purposes
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 in North
America
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, South
America
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, Europe, Africa, Central Asian, South
Asia
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, 
overall
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in
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apply
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North
America
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 and Europe show the largest proportion of H2O used in factory
purpose
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 I in other countries, agriculture is the main factor of
water
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 used. In
central
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Central
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 Asian South East
Asia
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,
the
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apply
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domestic usage
show
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shows
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 the lowest
percent
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per cent
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 Clearly see that in North
America
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 and Europe
water
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 is used more than half
in
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for
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 production
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purpose
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purposes
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, 48%
53
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and 53
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% respectively,
whereas
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 less than 40% of
water
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 is used
by
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for
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 cultivation and residential in terms of South
America
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 less than 34, 71% area
are
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is
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 covered by agriculture.
Remaining
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The remaining
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 are used
by
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for
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 construction
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purpose
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purposes
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, 10% and private utilised 90%. In Africa, more than central
Asia
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 and South
Asia
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, fourth, 5th% of
water
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 is distributed for farming productivity.
In contrast
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, houses and
warehouse
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warehouses
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 is less than 10%. Consider
in
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apply
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Asian countries.
Water
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 is used by private housing
is
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in
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 7% of both
the
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apply
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locations.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, purpose, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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