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Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In today`s contemporary era,
people
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 are forced to
work
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 in which they are not
intrested
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interested
 or they do not have
talent
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a talent
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 for that job role.
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is happen
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happens
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due to
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 family
pressure
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 or poverty, another reason could be responsibilities on
individual
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the individual
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,
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this
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which
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 can lead to failure or boredom.
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a person
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person
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people
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 have lots of responsibilities for
family
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their family
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 and they have
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a burdon
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burdon
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burden
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of
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on
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 the family
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buisness
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business
.
Due to
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this
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,
people
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has
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have
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 to handle their family
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buisness
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business
 after
parents
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their parents
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, they have
also
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pressure
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 from
family
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the family
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 to run the shop or they need to learn
the
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apply
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marketing for their
sattled
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settled
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buisness
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business
.
Moreover
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,
people
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 have responsibility on their shoulders for feeding the family and
kid`s
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kids
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,
also
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 they are
under
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in
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 poverty, so they still have select
such
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work
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 without their
intrest
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interest
 or
telent
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talent
.
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, there was a research done from Western Sydney University,
people
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are choose
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are choosing
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 to
work
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 at family
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buisness
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business
 despite their
intrest
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interest
, because of the family
pressure
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.
Due to
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this
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,
people
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 are facing tension or
they
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apply
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cannot spend their life happily, and
aslo
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also
 it
is lead
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leads
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 to failure for
person
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a person
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. Without
telent
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talent
 or particular
intrest
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interest
people
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 cannot be successful in their life or any field.
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,
people
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 are
also
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 facing
madical
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mental
illness
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illnesses
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with
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in
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brain
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the brain
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due to
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 stress
on
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from
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work
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, as
this
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 can lead to death as well.
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, there was
a
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an
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 article in
Times
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the Times
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 of India
says
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that says
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,
people
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 who
work
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 without talent or skill they facing serious mental problems in life, and they may suffer
with
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from
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barin
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brain
barin'
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tumer
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tumour
 in future
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 stress.
To conclude
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,
people
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 who
work
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 they hate or without skill because of family
pressure
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 and
sociel
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social
 factors, as they may suffer
with
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from
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 saviour brain damage in
thier
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their
 old age. Those can
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 lead to
permenet
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permanent
diesis
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diseases
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 in
body
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the body
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.

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Task Achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly outlines the main points you'll discuss.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to guide your reader.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on spelling and grammar for clarity, especially with words like 'interest' and 'burden.'
Task Achievement
You provided examples to support your points.
Task Achievement
You identified important issues like family pressure and stress.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dread
  • passion
  • inherent talent
  • fufilling
  • career
  • job
  • fulfilled
  • unhappy
  • unsatisfied
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • stress
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • self-esteem
  • emotional well-being
  • potential
  • achieve
  • success
  • personal growth
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