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The chart below gives information about the average annual pay of doctors and other workers in seven different countries in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the average annual pay of doctors and other workers in seven different countries in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The bar chart compares the average annual salaries of
doctors
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 and other workers in seven different countries in 2004.
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 the pattern varies from country to country. The most notable difference was in the US,
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 the smallest gap was observed in the Czech Republic. Looking first at the highest figures, the United States topped the chart, with
doctors
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 earning $120,000 annually, and other workers making only $43,000.
This
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 was the largest disparity of all, with
doctors
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’ salaries being almost three times higher. Of all countries, France showed a similar trend, where
doctors
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 earned $80,000 and
others
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 just $25,000. In Italy and Germany, identical patterns can be observed, with
doctors
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 receiving around $60,000–$61,000,
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 other employees made $20,000. Consistently outnumbering
others
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,
doctors
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 in these countries enjoyed noticeably higher pay.
Conversely
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, the gap becomes less noticeable in Switzerland and the Czech Republic. In Switzerland,
doctors
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 earned $65,000
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 other workers made $40,000. In the Czech Republic, the figures were much lower
overall
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 — $40,000 for
doctors
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 and $15,000 for
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 — but the same disparity persists. Finland followed a similar pattern, with salaries of $55,000 and $20,000 for
doctors
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 and
others
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.
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, regardless of the country,
doctors
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 always received a significantly higher amount, highlighting a global trend in the medical profession.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words doctors, others with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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