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The chart below gives information about the average annual pay of doctors and other workers in seven different countries in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the average annual pay of doctors and other workers in seven different countries in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The chart presents data on the average yearly earnings of
doctors
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 compared to other professionals across seven countries in 2004.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that in all countries
doctors
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 have higher salaries compared to other professions. Beginning with
doctors
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 the highest amount was from the US (120
thousand
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dollars
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 ),
while
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 the lowest number was from the Czech Republic at 40
thousand
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dollars
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 . In Germany and
Italy
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Italy,
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 there was a similar number at 61 and 60
thousand
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dollars
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 respectively.
However
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, in France,
annual
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the annual
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 earnings of
doctors
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 were 80
thousand
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dollars
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 . In Finland doctor’s incomes are 55
thousand
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dollars
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 . In Switzerland, they earn more than Finland (65
thousand
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dollars
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 ). In terms of other jobs, the biggest amount was similar in the US and Switzerland at 43 and 40
thousand
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dollars
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 respectively. In three countries Italy, Germany and Finland the salary of workers from other professions was the same at 20
thousand
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dollars
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 . In the Czech Republic, they earn less and the amount was 15
thousand
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dollars
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 . In France, their wages were 25
thousand
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dollars
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words doctors, thousand, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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