The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. Describe the information presented below. Comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. Describe the information presented below. Comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. Describe the information presented below. Comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.
The bar graph illustrates the average number of
hours
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per
week
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spent on unpaid
work
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by married individuals across three family groups:
these
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those
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without
children
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,
with
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those with
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1-2
children
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, and
with
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those with
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3 or more
children
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.
Overall
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at a glance, married women
spends
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spend
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significantly more
hours
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on unpaid
work
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per
week
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than married
men
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and
while
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women’s workload
rise
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rises
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dramatically with the number of
children
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the number of unpaid
work
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done by
men
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remains almost unchanged regardless
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of
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family size. In households without
children
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married women spend approximately 30
hours
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per
week
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on unpaid
work
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whereas
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married
men
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contribute approximately 18
hours
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. When
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the family
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family
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families
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have 1 - 2
children
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the amount of unpaid
work
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for women rises to about 50
hours
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weekly but
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the man
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man
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men
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had
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have
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remained stable. Family with 3 or more
children
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women’s unpaid
work
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peaks
approximately
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at approximately
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60
hours
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per
week
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.
However
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married
men
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saw their
hours
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decrease by about 3
hours
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to about 17
hours
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, work, children, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unpaid work
  • Household chores
  • Gender roles
  • Disparity
  • Societal expectations
  • Cultural norms
  • Full-time housewives
  • Part-time jobs
  • Traditional responsibilities
  • Domestic roles
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