The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first chart provides locations of
dance
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in a particular Australian town
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dedicated to young people,
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the second chart compares the variety of classes by two different age groups. In general,
pie
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the pie
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chart highlights
most
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dance
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classes were in private studios,
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the fewest were in college-based studios.
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, ballet
dance
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was popular under 11 years
participations
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, whilst modern
dance
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had more youngsters between 11 and 16 than those under 11
aged people
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. Starting with locations, private studies were dominated with 48%,
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school halls had half the number of the first area. Followed by details, community halls and others were held, at 18% of total classes. In stark contrast, college-based studios were the least, with 10%. As for the other data, ballet
dance
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attracted nearly 900 students which one of whom 600 youths who were
under
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the age of 11, whilst others were
ages
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of
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11 and 16. Turning to tap
dance
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, that type of
dance
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was popular with young people who were
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under 11, with nearly 450 participants and around 420 students aged 11 to 16 attending. The
last
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was modern
dance
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that attracted nearly 510 teenagers,
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aged 11
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-16 aged category and 300 participants, who were under 11.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words dance with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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