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The bar chart below shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for last year. The line shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for the last 40 years. Summarise the information below by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for last year. The line shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for the last 40 years. Summarise the information below by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart above displays the average
rainfall
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 by month in Australia
in
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over
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Linking Words
last
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the last
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year
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 and the past 40 years.
Overall
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, the average
rainfall
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 in the past
year
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 has
been through
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undergone
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 a high fluctuation over the whole months of the
year
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,
while
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 over the past 40 years it
started
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has started
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 falling gradually in all months. On the one hand, the monthly average of
rainfall
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 in
last
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year
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 began at 70
mm
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 in January and it decreased gradually to reach 20
mm
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 in April, but in may it increased to 40
mm
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 in may and in June it began to fall again with a constant decline in the next months to reach almost 5
mm
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 in October.
In
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At
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 the end of the
year
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, it stopped at 40
mm
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.
On the other hand
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, the average
rainfall
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 over the past 4 decades, began at 80
mm
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 in January and started decreasing in the following years to reach almost 25
mm
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 in April, after, it continued declining to has 10
mm
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 in September, but after that it started to increase gradually to reach 60
mm
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 in December.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rainfall, year, mm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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