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Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

From some
people
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's point of view, having access to purified
water
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 is a right that should be respected by supplying free
water
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 to every individual. In my opinion, providing clean
water
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 imposes a lot of costs on governments
and
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 these expenses should be paid by the
people
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. Some
people
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 argue that the supply of
water
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 should be free of charge
due to
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 their
rights
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right
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 to access healthy
water
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. They think that every government has the responsibility to build the infrastructure needed to purify and transfer clean
water
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 into houses
and
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 families do not have to pay anything for the
water
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 they consume.
This
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 is exemplified by the fact that for many
people
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 in Iran
especially
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 the ones who live in cities, the purified
water
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 is available in their taps
and
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 they pay approximately nothing for the
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that is
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 provided for them.
On the other hand
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, many individuals believe that every citizen should pay for the
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that is
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 supplied
for
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to
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 them. The cost of creating and maintaining the infrastructure and providing the equipment needed for purification and plumbing clean
water
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 is very high.
As a result
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, it is justifiable to take the amount of money
that is
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 spent
for
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on
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 cleaning
water
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 from the citizens.
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, most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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European
people
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 willingly pay the cost of their
water
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 consumption every month through their bank accounts. In conclusion,
although
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 access to clean
water
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 is a human right, there is no contradiction between
this
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 right and paying for
water
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 consumption. The processes of purifying
water
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 and transferring it to every individual's house are considerably expensive;
therefore
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, it is more reasonable to
take
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pass on
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 their costs
from
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to
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people
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.

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task achievement
Clarify your main ideas in each paragraph. Make sure each point is well developed and explained.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear connectors to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
Include more examples to support your arguments. This will strengthen your points.
strength
You have a clear argument and you present your opinions about the topic well.
strength
Your essay has a good structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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