Write a letter to a friend who has visited you a few days ago and has left his mobile at your place. Please mention: - The visit he paid you and how you felt about it. - How you found his/her cell phone at your place. - Suggest ways of sending it back to him/her.

Dear Neha, I hope
this
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letter finds you well. I'm writing
this
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letter to make you aware
about
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your mobile phone
which
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, which
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you forgot at my house during your
last
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visit. Honestly, it was a nice meeting with you
as
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, as
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everything went
amazing
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as we planned. I'm missing all our activities
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, from
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playing sports to eating out.
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evening, when I was cleaning my room where we spent
our all
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all our
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days, suddenly I came across
through
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a mobile phone
,
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.
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at
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first
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first,
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I didn't
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realize
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it
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,
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if
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it belongs to you, but when I tried to call you, it started ringing, which helped me to trace it. Since it is your personal property, I don't want
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to hand it
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over to anybody
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therefore
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, I want
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to it
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it to send
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send it to
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you safely
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, either
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by coming myself or you can come to pick it up at your convenience. Again, I had a great time with you
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I look forward to your prompt response. Take Care, Amanjot Kaur

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure all your ideas flow logically from one to the next. Use more linking words to connect your thoughts better.
task achievement
Try to be clearer when you mention how you found the phone. Also, consider giving specific options for sending it back.
tone
The letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is appropriate for writing to a friend.
task achievement
You addressed all points mentioned in the task prompt, showing a good understanding of what was required.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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