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The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table and pie chart illustrate the
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 of
research
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done
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projects done
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 by university
students
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in
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all over Australia between 2001 and 2010. From an
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perspective,
it is clear that
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students
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 have had a significant rise in the
number
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 of researchers in 2010. Another interesting point the majority of the researchers
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were
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 local
male
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males
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 in both years. Looking into the table first in detail,the local
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students
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 had
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 in the year 2010
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 the rate was around 39,488. Next ,the international
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students
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 experienced the lowest
number
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 was 5,192 in 2001.
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 , the total
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soured
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 from 38,849 to 54,081. The pie chart in the year 2001 , the locals
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bothe
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both
 genders had much more
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then
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than
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 the international
students
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the
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 numbers were 87 and 13 . In 2010, the local
male
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males
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 had done the most
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then
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, then
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 the females
with
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the
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a
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 ratio of 38,
while
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 the international
female
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females
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 jumped from 4 to 15
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their
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 results
they overcome
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overcoming those of
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 the
men's
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men
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, research, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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