some people believe that automation will lead to massive job losses, while others think it will create new job opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

With the rise of artificial intelligence and robotics, the role of machines in the workplace is expanding rapidly.
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destroy more jobs than it creates? Many people fear that
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will replace human
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, especially in industries
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as manufacturing, transportation, and customer service.
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systems in supermarkets reduce the need for cashiers,
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driverless vehicles could eliminate millions of jobs in logistics.
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could lead to high unemployment and social instability, particularly among
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workers who may struggle to adapt.
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creates new roles in technology development, maintenance, and oversight. As routine tasks are automated, humans can focus on more creative, strategic, and interpersonal roles.
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, history shows that technological revolutions like the Industrial Revolution ultimately led to more job creation than loss,
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the transition period can be challenging. In my opinion,
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automation
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may temporarily displace certain jobs, it will ultimately generate new opportunities, provided that governments and industries invest in retraining and education. By adapting to
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transformation, society can benefit from both economic growth and improved quality of work.

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Make sure to clearly explain all your ideas. Sometimes, your points could be a bit more detailed.
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Try to link your ideas better. Use more linking words to show how one point connects to another.
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Provide examples for every main point. This will make your argument stronger and more convincing.
coherence
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps the reader understand your main ideas.
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You have presented two views on the topic thoughtfully, which makes your essay balanced.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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