Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There has been a vast quantity of time and money
to be
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allocated to preserving wild
animals
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annually in
organizations
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and governments. Controversy has occurred around
this
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topic
which
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should be used either to
converse
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wild
animals
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or build human life.
This
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essay will discuss both spending balanced money and time to protect wild
animals
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and create a happy life.
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with, the authorities use their funds to plan the policy related to public health, social security and educational development. Unemployment, health crisis, and substandard education are
on
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the key influences, which cause serious national instability.
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,
while
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the high proportion of unemployment has been occurring in
nation
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the nation
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, there are various negative activities
such
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as increasing crimes, widening gap between rich and poor citizens, disorder
mental
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and physical well-being,
breaking
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and breaking
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the structure of
family
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the family
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. Another viewpoint is that wild
animals
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play a vital role
on
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in
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balancing
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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.
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, the activities of protected wild
animals
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absolutely
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are absolutely
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necessaries
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. They maintain a
stabilizing
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stabilising
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population of biota through prey, dispersing seeds,
pollination
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and pollination
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.
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, a range of birds pollinate flowers, which
help
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kinds of
floras
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flora
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reproduce and expand
distribution
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their distribution
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range.
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, wild
faunas
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fauna
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offer a large quantity of food for numerous tribes. The
authorized
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institutes and governments earmark money and time for their responsibility. Not only do they find ways to sustain the population of wild
faunas
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fauna
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, but they
build
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community power.
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, their activities create
the
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long-term sustainable development in society.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic. It should include a clear thesis statement.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the flow of your essay by using linking words like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally' to connect your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Add a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your opinion instead of leaving it open-ended.
task achievement
You have presented both sides of the argument, which shows understanding of the topic.
task achievement
Your examples are relevant and help illustrate your points about the importance of wild animals and human needs.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem stability
  • pollination
  • water purification
  • climate regulation
  • eco-tourism
  • scientific research
  • moral and ethical responsibility
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • financial cost
  • social issues
  • healthcare
  • education
  • fund allocation
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