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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 world,
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a lot
 of
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individuals
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 who believe that
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 learning will replace traditional
education
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which
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 is
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face to
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face
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education
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,
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 others say it's irreplaceable.
This
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eassy
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 will discuss both
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 of
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,and
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 strongly believe that
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-learning will replace traditional
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.
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,with the advancement of technology
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education
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 is becoming
more
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easier to
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access
 without the need to
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into
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 programs or universities to get educated.Another thing is the convenience of
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 learning, any student can access the course and lectures through
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 phone or laptop
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 will make students attend all the lectures without having any excuses.A good example is
blackboard
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, it's
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 website which makes students attend their classes
virtiualy
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virtually
 and write their assignments and
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 sitting in their home.I believe that
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 learning will become the most popular form of
education
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.
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,traditional learning needs to be
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face to
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face
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 and
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 not as convenient as
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e
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 learning
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,but
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 more accurate to grade students
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 them being present physically when the exam or assessment is taking place.But with higher rents
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 buildings and more expenses on electricity and
education
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 equipment, the replacement of traditional learning is unstoppable. In conclusion,I believe that in the near future class
rooms
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 will be replaced by virtual
class rooms
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classrooms
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language
Make sure to use correct spelling and grammar throughout your essay. For example, 'individual's' should be 'individuals', and 'alot' should be 'a lot'.
structure
Clearly separate your points using paragraphs. Each paragraph should discuss one main idea, which makes it easier to read.
content
Add more specific examples to support your points. For instance, include statistical data or studies that show the benefits of e-learning.
content
You presented both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced view.
task achievement
Your opinion is clear, which is important for task achievement.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-Learning
  • face-to-face education
  • remote learning
  • virtual classroom
  • webinar
  • digital platform
  • self-paced learning
  • interactive learning
  • course accessibility
  • academic networking
  • pedagogy
  • synchronous/asynchronous sessions
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • edtech (educational technology)
  • holistic development
  • practical skills
  • collaborative learning
  • digital divide
  • curriculum adaptation
  • technological literacy
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