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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart displays the
trend
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 of three types of crimes
occurred
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 in Newport city throughout the period from 2003
until
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to
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 2012.
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, there was a dramatic decline in burglary
incidents
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 between the years of 2005 and 2008,
whereas
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 a fluctuating movement in car and robbery
cases
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 occurred during the whole period. Burglary activities were at their highest number in 2004 , which was around 3700
cases
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 ,
then
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 dropped to their lowest at about 1300
incidents
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 2010.
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, the
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cases
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case
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trend
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 was steady
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apply
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between 2011 and 2012. In regard to the other two sorts of
incidents
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, Car thefts reached the peak of their
trend
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 in 2004 by recording around 2700
cases
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,
while
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 the smallest numbers were documented in 2006 and 2008, around 2100 records.
Robberies
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The robbery
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trend
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 was fluctuating from the beginning of the
trend
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 up to the end in 2012, with the biggest statistics pertaining to
this
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 type being about 900
incidents
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.
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, the
cases
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 recorded their lowest number in the year of 2008 , which was nearly 450.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words trend, incidents, cases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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