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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

In
todays
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today's
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 world, a lot of
students
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 tend to take a
year
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gap
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 between finishing
school
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 and going to
university
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.
This
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eassy
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essay
 will discuss the pros and cons of a
gap
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year
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.
Firstly
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,
Students
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 usually feel tired and drained after completing their high
school
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 ,so taking a
year
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 off between will give them more
time
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 for themselves.A lot of
advantage
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advantages
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 are gained if
students
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 take a
year
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 off,the most important advantage is
they
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that they
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 have free
time
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 and will, no assignments or presentations
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needed
nor
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, nor
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 studying for exams
which
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, which
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 makes
students
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 feel free after finishing
school
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. Another thing is they have more
time
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 to learn new hobbies
which
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, which
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 could really help them eventually in
the
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university
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.
In addition
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 to free
time
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 and will,some
students
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 start their own
bussines
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business
 which makes them financially stable before going to college.
On the other hand
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,missing one
year
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 of a
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students
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student's
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 life is a lot of
time
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 wasted.The main disadvantage of having a
gap
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year
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 is
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students
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that students
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 don't know how to handle and control the free
time
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 correctly,which sometimes could end in a bad situation like consuming drugs, alcohol,
going
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or going
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 out to parties to waste
time
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.And the problem is
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students
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that students
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 don't know that they are wasting
time
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 until the
year
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 finishes. In conclusion, I believe that having a
gap
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year
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 between high
and
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school and
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university
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 has more advantages and development
on
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students
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 than starting
university
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 right after high
school
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.

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coherence cohesion
You have a clear conclusion that summarizes your opinion.
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You addressed both advantages and disadvantages of a gap year.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • work experience
  • internships
  • traveling
  • life experiences
  • personal development
  • independent
  • self-reliant
  • educational progress
  • graduation timeline
  • financial burden
  • academic momentum
  • structured academic environment
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