IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 2.5

copelands below show the layout of universities sports centre now and how it will look after development summarized information by selecting and reporting the main features an make comparisons relevant

The diagram illustrates how the
sports
Use synonyms
 centre of
university
Correct article usage
the university
show examples
 currently looks
like
Change preposition
apply
show examples
and what changes will be made in future.
Overall
Linking Words
, the outdoor courts
which
Punctuation problem
, which
show examples
 are
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
west
Correct article usage
the west
show examples
 and east
Use synonyms
side
Fix the agreement mistake
sides
show examples
 of the
Use synonyms
pool
Punctuation problem
pool,
show examples
 will be removed
and
Punctuation problem
, and
show examples
new
Correct article usage
a new
show examples
sports
Use synonyms
 shop, café,
sports
Use synonyms
 hall and dance studio will be constructed to provide more facilities.
However
Linking Words
, the seating area, entrance, reception and
pool
Use synonyms
 will remain
same
Correct article usage
the same
show examples
.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, the gym area will be expanded in
upcoming
Correct article usage
the upcoming
show examples
 years, which is
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 the east
side
Use synonyms
 of
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
 reception.
Moreover
Linking Words
, the
sports
Use synonyms
 hall will be placed next to the seating space
;
Punctuation problem
,
show examples
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
which
Correct word choice
where
show examples
sports
Use synonyms
 events can be
organized
Use the right word
organised
show examples
.
Linking Words
also
Fix capitalization
Also
show examples
, in the southeast part of
Use synonyms
sports
Correct article usage
the sports
show examples
hall
Add a comma
hall,
show examples
 a changing room and café will be
build
Wrong verb form
built
show examples
. Surprisingly, a dance studio is going to be a new addition
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 the east
side
Use synonyms
 of
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
pool
Use synonyms
. To add on, on the west
side
Use synonyms
 of the centre
a
Punctuation problem
, a
show examples
leisure
pool
Use synonyms
 will be placed in place of
outdoor
Correct article usage
the outdoor
show examples
 court.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
Provide more details about the changes, like exact locations and sizes of new features.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect ideas, such as 'however', 'furthermore', and 'in addition'.
task achievement
Make sure to summarize the main points clearly and include a conclusion.
task achievement
The essay clearly describes the planned changes to the sports centre.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction clearly states the current and future layout of the sports centre.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: