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The graph below shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries in the period 1980-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries in the period 1980-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the amount of wind
energy
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 produced in four countries,
India
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,
Denmark
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,
Germany
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 and the United States, between 1980 and 2000, measured in
megawatts
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.
Overall
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, the production of wind-generated
energy
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 showed an upward trend in all four countries over the period. The United States consistently produced the largest amount of wind
energy
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 until 1995, after which
Germany
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 became the leading producer by 2000.
In contrast
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,
India
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 and
Denmark
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 generated comparatively lower amounts throughout the years. 
In 1985, the United States produced just under 1200
megawatts
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 of wind
energy
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, far surpassing the other three countries, which generated less than 400
megawatts
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 each. By 1990, the U.S. output had risen slightly to around 1600
megawatts
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,
while
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Denmark
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 and
Germany
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 both recorded approximately 400 and 500
megawatts
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, respectively, and
India
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 remained below 200
megawatts
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. A significant change occurred between 1995 and 2000.
While
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 the U.S. output plateaued at around 1600
megawatts
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,
Germany
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 experienced a sharp rise from about 800 to 1700
megawatts
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, overtaking the U.S. by the end of the period.
Denmark
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 and
India
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also
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 saw steady increases, reaching nearly 900 and 1100
megawatts
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, respectively, in 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, india, denmark, germany, megawatts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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