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The graph below shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries in the period 1980-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries in the period 1980-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The bar chart shows how much wind
energy
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 was generated in four different
countries
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 and the United States between 1985 and 2000. The amount is given in
megawatts
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.
Overall
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, all four
countries
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 increased their wind
energy
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 production during
this
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 time. Of all
countries
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,
Germany
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 showed the biggest rise and became the top producer by 2000. The United States stayed high throughout,
while
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India
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 and
Denmark
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also
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 improved steadily.
However
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, the pattern differs from
country
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 to
country
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 in some years. Looking first at the year 1985, the United States produced significantly higher quantities of wind
energy
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, reaching around 1200
megawatts
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.
This
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 was of a mere 500
megawatts
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 for
Germany
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,
while
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Denmark
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 and
India
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 made up roughly 250 and 200
megawatts
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 , respectively. The gap becomes noticeable between the U.S. and the other three
countries
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. In 1990, all
countries
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 saw growth, but the same disparity persisted in
energy
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 levels. The U.S. stayed far ahead,
while
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Germany
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 rose a little to 600
megawatts
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.
India
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 and
Denmark
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 increased slightly but remained lower. In 1995, the
energy
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 levels became closer.
Germany
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,
India
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, and
Denmark
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 each produced around 900 to 1000
megawatts
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,
while
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 the U.S. stayed at about 1300.
Conversely
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, by the year 2000, the most notable difference was that
Germany
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 had jumped to 1700
megawatts
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, overtaking the U.S. for the first time.
Denmark
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also
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 rose sharply, reaching nearly 1400.
India
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 followed with 1000.
However
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, the pattern varies from
country
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 to
country
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 in how quickly they increased.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, countries, megawatts, germany, india, denmark, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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