Fastfood is becoming one part of our life. some people say that every individual should take responsiblity for it while other people say that it the government's responsiblity. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Public
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argue
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argues
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that
people
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need to take
responsbility
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responsibility
for
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fastfood
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fast food
become
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becoming
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our part of
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part of our
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life
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while
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, while
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others say that it is
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government's
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the government's
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responsibility.
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essay will describe for both
individual
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the individual
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and
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the government's
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government's roles
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government
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to take
controls
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control
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.
People
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need to improve their efficiency to get more time
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to
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finish their activities.
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,
people
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need to spend their time rapidly
for
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to
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fullfil
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fulfil
their basic needs. One hand, producing meals for an individual
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needs
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spend
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more time from preparing to consuming.
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,
bussiness
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business
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quick
food
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servis
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services
which
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are
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afford
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affordable
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by
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everybody
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everybody,
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called
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fastfood
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fast food
.
However
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,
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fastfood
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fast food
has some problems in
health
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issue
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issues
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.
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, consuming
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fastfood
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fast food
in
a
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the
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long term could
be increasing
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increase
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weight, risk
on
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of
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hypertension, and other metabolic
syndrom
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syndromes
.
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,
health
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experts and
people
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who
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are concern
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concern
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concerned
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on
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about
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its issue are
propose
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proposing that
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individuals
to
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apply
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limit their consumption
on
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of
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fastfood
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fast food
. They argue that
everybody
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has control
on
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over
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their body, and has
responsbility
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responsibility
to keep their body healthy.
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,
People
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who
have
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are
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concern
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concerned
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on
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about
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healthy
food
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has
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have
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encourage
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encouraged
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for
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apply
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everybody
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to limit their
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fastfood
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fast food
with
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consumption with
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some method and measurement. The
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activist has
proposes
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proposed
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the
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that the
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government
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to
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apply
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take
role
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a role
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. The
government
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needs to regulate
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issue by
control
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controlling
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the
food
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standar
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standard
and
raise
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raising
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people
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people's
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awareness about
healty
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healthy
food
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.
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, the
govoernment
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government
can
be controlling
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control
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the
food
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healthy
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health
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standar
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standards
and
promoting
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promote
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healthy
food
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in
mass
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the mass
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media.
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, the
government
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have to
provides
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provide
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health
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monitor
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monitoring
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for
everybody
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regularly. To
summarize
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summarise
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,
Public
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the Public
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has
right
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the right
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to keep healthy by their efforts
and
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, and
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the
government
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need
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needs
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to support with their policy
which
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, which
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is
make
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to make
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sure
everybody
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get
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gets
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same
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the same
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access
for
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to
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it.

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language accuracy
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task achievement
The essay addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, which is important for the task.
task achievement
You included some relevant health issues related to fast food, showing an understanding of the topic.

Your opinion

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Topic Vocabulary:
  • responsibility
  • individual choices
  • government regulation
  • dietary habits
  • health implications
  • obesity epidemic
  • fast-paced lifestyle
  • nutritional education
  • convenience food
  • public health campaigns
  • preventative measures
  • healthcare costs
  • food industry
  • socioeconomic factors
  • informed decisions
  • quality of life
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