MANY CITIES CONTAIN OLD PUBLIC BUILDINGS,SUCH AS TOWN HALLS ANFF ART GALLERIES,WHICH ARE EXPENSIVE TO REPAIR.SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT GOVERNMENTS SHOULD REPLACE THESE BUILDINGS WITH NEWS ONES.OTHER PEOPLE THINK THAT IT IS IMPORTANT TO KEEP THE OLD BUIldings discuss both these views and give your own opinion Com

Many argue that
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should not be wasted on old establishments like town halls and art
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as huge
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are being wasted to renovate them,
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others state that it is necessary to maintain old structures, because
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extreme cultural and regional values.
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both sides have merit of their own,
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I will explain my viewpoint in the essay below.
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, a huge amount of
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is required to sustain
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in the old buildings, especially when businesses need to meet certain requirements for safety purposes. Old establishments have out-of-date safety equipment
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hard to replace without structural damage and
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a high risk.
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, some old buildings are made of materials that are flammable and resources to eliminate those fires are not sufficient. In order to make those structures secure complete set of equipment needs to be changed, which is very expensive, and the risk of property damage is high as well.
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, some locations hold very high value
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a cultural standpoint and can generate revenue by bringing tourism. These
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should be maintained with extreme caution
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can never be a factor when repairs are in need.
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, Jaipur is called the "Pink City" in Rajasthan, India and holds great cultural pride in the native population.
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its unique ancient look, it attracts tourism to a great extent
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population gets business.
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, in my opinion, it should be decided
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the value of the property
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that location should be renovated or replaced with the recent requirement of geographical location.

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Make sure to clearly state your own opinion in the introduction and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.
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Include more specific examples to support your arguments.
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The essay presents both sides of the argument well.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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