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Some people think that distance learning programs can never be as good as traditional, face-to-face education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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 there are a lot of schools that make
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 learning programs for their education systems. But not all schools use
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 program for their education systems because they don't think
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 program is more effective than
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. They want to keep the traditional systems because it's more
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 for their
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.
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, is it true that
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 learning programs have a lot of benefits
,
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online
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 education allows
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 to learn at their own pace and from any location. There is a platform for the
students
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 to learn something from different sources,
they
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 can explore more and more.
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, they learn about history not only from books but
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 from websites. over that, the
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 can get
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 perspective
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 history.
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face to
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 learning can
make
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a
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student
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students
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 and
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teacher
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teachers
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meet up so they can
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the
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study more effectively,
also
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 it reduces
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distractions from
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electronic
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devices
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. They can study in discussion groups
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 is very helpful for every student.
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,they learn about
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 of organisations that must be
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 by every student for their
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. In
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 I believe that both have their positive impact on the
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 studying.
Distance
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 learning programs help
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 to study from any location and can explore more material from the internet.
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Face to
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face
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 learning allows
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 to reduce the distractions from electronic
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devices
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.
Distance
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 learning and
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face to
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face-to-face
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face
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 offer unique experiences, rather than choosing one over the other.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion or position on the topic. This helps the reader understand your stance.
coherence and cohesion
Try to connect your ideas more clearly. Use linking words and phrases to show the relationship between your points.
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Add more specific examples to support your points. More examples can help to make your argument stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure correct punctuation and spacing, especially after commas and in-between words. This improves the overall presentation of your writing.
task achievement
You provided a balanced view by discussing both distance learning and traditional education, which shows good understanding of the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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