Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish(garbage). Why do you think this is happening? what can government do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

It is irrefutable that these days we are creating the most
garbage
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. There are many socio-cultural changes and technical advancements that can be held responsible for the growing phenomenon. In the following paragraphs, I intend to discuss the reason for
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up rubbish and the steps officials can
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take
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to reduce its number.
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, it can be noticed that in
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materialistic world, people tend to buy things they don't actually need. They still purchase it to flaunt on social
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media,
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that
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impacts more people
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they buy unwanted stuff too
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this
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cycle goes on.
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, my friends
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have been
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collecting large
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of shoes , glasses, clothes, cars and many more electronic
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. Most
garbage
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contribution, I
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comes from
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food. Packed food and beverages we can see everywhere easy
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, we just eat
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and throw the plastic. Plastic
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the key role here
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its
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being used in everything
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its
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the hardest to dispose
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get rid of, so does the rubber tire. To nip the evil in the bud,
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masses and legislators must work hand in hand. There are some measures we have to follow to deal with
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problem. First of all, sorting
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It
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is
first and the
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most essential step to follow by every household and administration. Sorting will make it easy to deal with
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, organic and
garbage
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. Organic waste can be used as
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and
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recycling will give new life to the waste.
Government
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government's
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role is to encourage and implement strict laws and penalties
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not
following
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.
To conclude
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,
government
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the government
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is responsible
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for dealing
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with rubbish
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without the help of
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citizens,
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its
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going to be a hard nut to crack. I believe we should buy the things we need
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thus
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, thus
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less
garbage
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is produced
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prefer recycling
packing
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packaging
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.

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task response
Include a clearer thesis statement in your introduction to outline the main points of your essay. This will help set a clear direction for your writing.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your paragraphs start with topic sentences that tell the reader what each paragraph will talk about. This will improve the overall flow of ideas.
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Provide more specific examples to support your ideas. For instance, instead of saying 'packed food contributes to garbage,' you could mention specific brands or types of products that add to rubbish.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and word choice for clarity. Some sentences are a bit hard to understand. For example, 'my friends been collecting large chunk of shoes' should read 'my friend has been collecting a large number of shoes.'
task response
You identified relevant causes of rubbish production, such as consumerism and the impact of packaging.
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You suggested practical solutions involving both government action and community involvement, which gives your essay a positive angle.

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