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The charts below show the percentageof water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentageof water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart displays the proportions of water usage for various reasons in six different areas globally. 
Overaall
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America
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 consumed the
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the
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most
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water for
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use
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America
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, Africa, Central
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Aisa
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Asia
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 and South East
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Aisa
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Asia
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 used it the most for agricultural
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, the least
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 water in the six areas was for domestic
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. In North
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 and
Europe
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, the highest usage percentage was for industrial
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 48%
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 and 53% in
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. Followed by agricultural
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 in both
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 where North
America
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 consumption was 39% surpassing
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 was 32%. Domestic came
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 with almost one quarter in two. The highest consumption percentage in South
America
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, Africa, Central
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Aisa
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Asia
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 and South East
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Aisa
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Asia
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 was for
agricultral
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agricultural
use
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 with 71%, 84%, 88% and 81% respectively. The industrial and domestic rates were about one quarter of the portion in the four places.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, europe, use, aisa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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