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Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of old houses in local areas. Others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own style. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is no denying the fact that most
people
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 are turning to build their
houses
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 in
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a new
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new
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new,
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 stylish
.
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way.
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 it is a commonly held belief that citizens should keep using ancient designs for their
houses
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, there is
also
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 an argument that
people
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 must have their own choice to select the style that they want.
This
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 essay will analyse
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand, old buildings are a symbol of
countries'
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a country's
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 tradition and they show
people
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's customs.
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, the features of
houses
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 are special. You can see how
old
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the old
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 generation
were think
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thought
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 and their
intrests
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interests
.
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,continuing to build them in urban
area
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areas
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 will attract tourists to
coming
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come
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 and
enjoying
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enjoy
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 the unique view, and introduce them to their culture.
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, most visitors to China come to see the amazing architecture,especially in Chinese villages
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, controlling
people
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's
houses
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 is unfair and will obstruct the
civilisation
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apply
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development. It is
also
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 possible to say that modern designs, nowadays, are more practical, they have better infrastructure, they
service
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serve
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 residents' needs,and
it
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they
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 help
to
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 space saving.
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, humans always have different tastes
whether
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, whether
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 in buildings or clothes , and even foods, so
choose
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choosing
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 the farming is considered right for them. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
this
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 question. On balance,
however
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, I tend to believe that the government should give
people
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 their freedom to design their
houses
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,
in
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at
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 the same time,they should keep old models in specific regions like
countryside
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the countryside
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly supports your main idea. Make sure to connect points with linking words, such as 'firstly', 'however', and 'in conclusion'.
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Try to include more specific examples to support your points, as this will strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your sentences don't have grammar mistakes. Simple checking can help improve the clarity of your ideas.
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The essay discusses both sides of the argument, which shows a good understanding of the topic.
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You provided a clear opinion in the conclusion, which helps the reader understand your perspective.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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